Thursday, December 11, 2008
last week
finals week
BACK TO SCHOOL
thanksgiving
Wednesday, December 10, 2008
Christmas Break
Date Auction
Finals
Tuesday, December 9, 2008
Monday, December 8, 2008
Sunday, December 7, 2008
Blog 14
Blog 13
Blog 12
Blog 11
Blog 10
Blog 9
Blog 8
Blog 7
Blog 6
Blog 5
Blog 13
Christmas Eve is at my house this year because my aunt and uncle who usually have it are in Florida. I hope it snows at least a little on Christmas and Christmas Eve. Snow seems to brighten up winter and make it better, as long as its not a huge storm.
Blog 12
Blog 11
Thursday, December 4, 2008
Boston Sports
Winter Break
Wednesday, December 3, 2008
Winter
2 more weeks
Thanksgiving break
Sunday, November 30, 2008
thanksgiving
Tuesday, November 25, 2008
Sunday, November 23, 2008
happy birthday
getting back on track
ouch only 3 blogs
Blog 10
At home, I work at the Old Navy in the mall near my house. The job itself is easy, but I do not suggest working in retail to anyone. The customers my co-workers and I come in contact with are, a lot of the time, ridiculous and not very understanding or friendly. Customers also get crazy if they think something is on sale when it actually isn't, just because they misread a sign they blame it on the store. Returns are especially hard to deal with because people do not understand the concept of saving a receipt or a tag and that something cannot be returned like a year later.
Blog 9
Monday, November 17, 2008
Uneventful
Thursday, November 13, 2008
Friends
Wednesday, November 12, 2008
Tuesday, November 11, 2008
Math Problems
Monday, November 10, 2008
Basketball
The days
Sunday, November 9, 2008
Weekend
Monday, November 3, 2008
halloween
Sunday, November 2, 2008
Blog 8
Halloween
Monday, October 27, 2008
First Semester
Sunday, October 26, 2008
Blog 7
Halloween is this Friday which is another one of my favorite things about fall. I like dressing up on Halloween and I miss going trick-or-treating with all my friends when I was young. Haunted houses and scary movies are more things I like about the fall and Halloween.
For Halloween I am going to UMass to see my boyfriend. A bunch of our friends from our hometown are coming there and some of my friends from here are going too. I am dressing up as a referee and my boyfriend might be a boxer.
Thursday, October 23, 2008
Wednesday, October 22, 2008
upset
Monday, October 20, 2008
Obama
Wedding reception
Red sox
Sunday, October 19, 2008
Blog 6
Blog 5
Friday, October 17, 2008
Red Sox Come Back
Thursday, October 16, 2008
Long Weekend
Tuesday, October 14, 2008
Image Analysis- Tiger
an Wilson
English 101+
Analyzing Image
Tiger
The professional world of golf is completely different now than it was back when it originated. Golf is even different from ten years ago. Professional golfers do more than play golf. They have become walking posters and advertisements. Most noticeably you might see them hit a good shot or sink a good putt but subconsciously you’re constantly seeing subtle symbols and advertisers names written everywhere.
This image is an image of 3 golfers, Tiger Woods, Phil Mickelson, and Adam Scott standing around talking and shaking hands before a round of golf. Tiger Woods is in the center of the two golfers and the picture. His whole front is facing the camera and is the main focus of this image. He is looking at Adam Scott who is to his right but the left side of the picture. Adam and Tiger are shaking hands; you can see the back and right side of Adam but not his full face. Phil Mickelson is on Tigers left and on the right side of the picture. He is standing there kind of in a mirror image of Adam facing both Adam and Tiger. Like with Adam you can see only his side and back but it is Phil’s left side. Phil is watching the other two while they shake hands and appear to be laughing together. Tiger is clearly smiling and laughing while it appears Adam is too but you can’t see his whole face. Adam and Tiger’s handshake is a little off though. Tiger is using his right hand like most people would but he is shaking the left hand of Adam Scott. Maybe the two were in a weird position and maybe that is what they are laughing at. Or maybe Adam has a weak or sore right hand.
What is most interesting about this photo though is all the advertising that is going on in it. When looking at Tiger Woods sometimes your looking at him but other times your staring into the heart of a living Nike ad. Tiger may be the most marketable human being on the planet and Nike is taking full advantage of that. The Nike swoosh right on the heart of his perfectly fitted shirt. His hat has the Nike swoosh right in the center of it. It might be a subtle swoosh but everybody see's it. Nike has done such a good job dressing Tiger up head to toe every week that people are starting to get just as into "what is Tiger wearing this week" as they are the actual tournament.
Other companies are attempting to compete with Nike's advertising now too, as evident by the other two golfers in the picture. You can see Callaway Golf written on Phil's sleeve and on the back of his hat. Adam has Titleist written on the back of his hat. Also on the side of Adam's hat are the letters FJ which stands for Foot joy, which is another one of his sponsors. All of these golfers are decked out in advertisements.
These three are the perfect example of how companies use golfers to advertise. In the background of this picture you can see a glimpse of the hundreds of fans who come out to see these guys, hundreds of people going to watch golf but end up seeing advertisements. That's not even including the millions watching Tiger on TV and seeing that Nike swoosh. Today golfers do so much more than just play the game; they sell products.
picture essay
Analysis
Mr. Meek
October 6, 2008
This is a picture of Jacoby Ellsbury . A twenty five year old major league baseball player. In this picture you can tell that he plays for the Boston Red Sox and his number is 46. There are three parts of analyzing a picture which are objective detail, commentary, and element. First off you can tell that Jacoby Ellsbury is playing in a world series game because he has the world series logo patched on his arm. Another objective detail is that his baseball hamlet has a Boston B on it, which stands for the Boston Red Sox. The picture is framing around him, and everything else is blurred out. This shows that he focus and ready for the next pitch.
The commentary of this picture would be that Jacoby Ellsbury is focused on hitting the ball. Another commentary analysis is that it shows how focused Ellsbury is when he’s up at the plate. The picture could be being showing that this is a big play for Jocaby Ellsbury and how he focused on scoring or making a major play in the game. Element is other part of analyzing a picture. The framing in this picture is around Jacoby Ellsbury. Everything in the background is blurred out and your unable to see the background. The lighting in the picture is over Ellsbury. You can tell that the light is over Ellsbury because his uniform is bright and there’s a close up on him. There’s a lot of things that make up the element aspect of analysis. For example lighting, framing, and content. The content in this picture is the Jacoby Ellsbury named is outlined.
picture essay
Analysis
Mr. Meek
October 6, 2008
This is a picture of Jacoby Ellsbury . A twenty five year old major league baseball player. In this picture you can tell that he plays for the Boston Red Sox and his number is 46. There are three parts of analyzing a picture which are objective detail, commentary, and element. First off you can tell that Jacoby Ellsbury is playing in a world series game because he has the world series logo patched on his arm. Another objective detail is that his baseball hamlet has a Boston B on it, which stands for the Boston Red Sox. The picture is framing around him, and everything else is blurred out. This shows that he focus and ready for the next pitch.
The commentary of this picture would be that Jacoby Ellsbury is focused on hitting the ball. Another commentary analysis is that it shows how focused Ellsbury is when he’s up at the plate. The picture could be being showing that this is a big play for Jocaby Ellsbury and how he focused on scoring or making a major play in the game. Element is other part of analyzing a picture. The framing in this picture is around Jacoby Ellsbury. Everything in the background is blurred out and your unable to see the background. The lighting in the picture is over Ellsbury. You can tell that the light is over Ellsbury because his uniform is bright and there’s a close up on him. There’s a lot of things that make up the element aspect of analysis. For example lighting, framing, and content. The content in this picture is the Jacoby Ellsbury named is outlined.
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What is a Teacher?
English 101+
October 9, 2008
What is a Teacher?
What is a teacher? Is a teacher just the professor standing in front of you in your college class? The answer is no. Anyone can be a teacher; your mother, a friend, and the person that helped you perfect your golf swing. This can be anyone who you leave knowing something new.
First of all, in order to be a teacher you need a student. Without a student you cannot teach. All the knowledge you have and share will not mean anything if no one is there to learn. Does this mean you have to have students in front of you to teach or know that you have students? Not at all, many people have no idea that they have students. This can be the person who is looking to you as you work hard to get that promotion. Students are essential, but remember that students are everywhere. They may not be in front of you but know that they are there.
What does a teacher do? Well first thing they do is share their knowledge with others. This knowledge includes things you have learned from experience, education, and life. It is endless and doesn’t always have to be complicated but your student is expecting you to know about what you are teaching, “Students expect professors to be… knowledgeable,” (Helterbran). It can be something complex like how to draw hyperbolas or as simple as drawing a smiley face. You may not think what you have to offer is worthy of being considered knowledge but no knowledge is bad knowledge and there is always someone out there in need of it.
A teacher also guides you. Guidance in simple terms is direction, supervision, or influence. It is not enough to just share your knowledge but you must help them understand it, “Students are also sensitive to the schism between a professor's knowledge-base and the ability to get it across to students at the students' level of knowledge and experience,” (Helterbran). Knowledge is not useful unless the student understands it so guidance and direction is important in the process to understanding. This can be explaining and showing how to hold a basketball right in order to achieve a free-throw or explaining how to speak to your parents about a really important problem. Guidance isn’t as complicated as many think. Be confident in your knowledge and it will be easy to help and guide another.
The last important part of being a teacher is the ability to answer questions. Many people will not always get something quickly just from your guidance and explanations. “Students are also keenly interested in having… questions answered,” (Helterbran). Many students will need to ask question in order to fully understand something and if you are unable to answer these questions the student will never be able to fully understand. This is why answering questions is important. The student has the puzzle almost finished and they just need that last piece, your answers, to help them finish it.
These three things are the most important factors in order to be a teacher. You must have all three or your student may not fully understand what you are trying to teach. These three things are not hard to do and when done, you will be just as great as the people who taught you everything that got you to where you are today. You may not even realize some of the teachers in your life; the person that taught you how to ride a bike, to open your locker, to act during a job interview, or how to handle a relationship. All these people were teachers and now it’s your turn to do the same.
References
Helterbran, Valeri R. "The ideal professor: student perceptions of effective instructor practices, attitudes, and skills.(Report)." Education 129.1 (Fall 2008): 125(14). General OneFile. Gale. Fitchburg Public Library. 14 Oct. 2008
Under Aged Drinking
The government should allow teenagers over the age of eighteen to purchase and consume alcohol. The government allows them to vote, go to war and die for them; they should change the laws to allow them to have alcohol. Adults think that kids under twenty one years of age should not be allowed to drink because they do not show responsibility. Adults have many reasons to believe that their child or children can not be responsible because the adult did the same things that we as kids do and they do not want use to make the same mistakes that they did. Yes this could be a good reason but not all kids do the same things as their parents did as kids.
People drink for many reasons but teenagers drink for different reasons than adults. Most kids drink to have fun and get buzzed or just to think that they are cool by drinking and sometimes acting like idiots. Most of the time youth drink at parties where people witness them having fun, they don’t just come home and have a beer to relax. Teens and adults are different, adults will have a drink after a long day at work, so they can relax, and adolescents drink so that they can have a good time. In some instances people do drink too much and do drive home which becomes extremely bad because it endangers themselves and others. Teens do have different reasons for drinking but the reasons that parents drank when they were teens use the same basic principals, then and now.
Adolescent drinking is very bad but most teens show maturity about their drinking behaviors. Lots off teens do not drive drunk they either have a friend drive or they stay where they were partying. Adults can cause accidents to because they go to bars where they usually have to drive home. But the under aged drinkers party at some ones house so they usually stay there. Yes drinking can be fun; it can bring the shy person out to be more out going or the outgoing person to be more relaxed. One problem with being the shy person can be shown that they are more reliable on alcohol to become the outgoing person.
The drinking age should be lowered to eighteen because like other people say that if a person can vote and go to war they should be allowed to have a beer. If teens are allowed to drink then the laws for drunk driving should be stricter for the people between the ages of eighteen and twenty one. The laws should stay the same for people over the age of twenty one. If teens can drink then they might become more responsible when they do leave college life and start to be in the real world. This responsibility could help people to make the right choices in order to keep their life on track.
Under aged drinking is bad to most people but it can be a good life lesson for some. Having a bad time drinking or not remembering what happened most of the night can change the way people think about drinking. It can make some one realize that they should control themselves better or they should just not drink at all anymore. People have many thoughts about drinking but we are all entitled to our opinion. The consumption of alcohol will always be a problem in our country no matter what the laws are because there will always be a drinking age and there always will be people that don’t follow the rules.
10/08/08
Eng. 101
8:15-9:05
The definition of youth is “the appearance, freshness, vigor, and characteristics of one who is young”. This picture represents youth in its entirety. When you’re young, nothing in life gets better than standing on the field victorious. Looking at this picture for the first time it represents youth, happiness, and excitement.
The picture consists of young males which seem to be celebrating after a sporting event. It seems this way because three of them are in uniform, two have face paint on and the other two are just there celebrating too. Also one of the other kids in the image looks like he has an opposing team basketball sweatshirt on. However they seem to be joking with him and putting one of the baseball hats on his head.
There are a few reasons that lead me to believe that this was a baseball game. One of the reasons is that the three boys that are in uniform. Also the uniforms that they were wearing are dirty. So they may have slid or dove for a ball during the game. Another reason is that the background to the picture is dark, so it could mean that it was night time. If it was night time and they are still outside in short sleeve shirts, then it would have to be nice weather like spring, baseball season.
Another thing that I notice looking at this picture is the cars that are in the background. The cars in the picture are located on the bottom right side of the picture. They are out of focus but you can still tell what they are and it makes it easier to tell what they are because of the license plate glowing from the flash. Above the two cars there is a bright light. The bright light seems to be a streetlight. Those are two good reasons that make me think that they are outside at night in the parking lot. The biggest thing that leads me to believe is that other than those two things in the background everything is dark like the night sky.
There are a few reasons why I think they are celebrating. One of the reasons that I think they are celebrating is that they are all crowded around each other, laughing and smiling. One of them has face paint on with his hand raised high in the air. The others all have their arms around each other, and one of the baseball players is on the back of one of his friends. Also if they would let someone from the apposing team, take a picture with them, because if they lost and were not celebrating I don’t think they would want someone to take a picture with them from the team that just beat them.
To someone just looking at this picture that was not there it shows friendship. It shows friendship because there all together laughing holding each other and just having fun with each other. I also don’t think that they would allow someone with the opposing teams sweat shirt be with them, or hang out with them if there wasn’t a great deal of friendship going on between them. Another example of friendship in this picture is for two kids to paint their faces and put the numbers of their friend’s faces to show the friendships. In conclusion, that picture represents the definition of youth.
concept revision
Biological relatives are only the tip of the iceberg when you talk about family. There are many other people who you can consider your family, and there are deeper meanings to the word. If you can understand the effect that your family has on you, you can distinguish the people in it. Your entire being is created by the people around you. Weather it’s your parents, grandparents, aunts. Uncles, and cousins, or the people you choose to put around you. In an article from the American Journal of Sociology, Professors Timothy Elblarz, and Adrian Raferty state that;” Children from single-father families and stepfamilies have consistently had lower attainments than children from both two-biological-parent and single-mother families.” ajs Volume 105 Number 2 (September 1999): 321–65. This shows a perfect example of what I mean. Obviously, your parents have the largest impact, because there who you learn how to make decisions from. Even so, everyone else in your life affects your personality as well.
Most groups see family as just blood relatives. I strongly disagree with that concept. Family is anyone who takes care of you, is honest with you, and you feel comfortable with. This includes best friends, team mates, band members, step parents, and so many more people. Sometimes I don’t count some of my blood relatives as my family. My Biological grandfather has never been in my life. He was never in my mother’s either. I don’t see him as family. My grandmother did remarry in 1992, and her husband since then I see as my true grandfather. He has been there since I was born, and even though he is technically my mother’s step father, he is considered blood. If you have a step father who has taken care of you more then your Biological father, wouldn’t that make him your “real” dad? Another group people don’t think about is your parent’s friends. II only have 3 aunts and uncles who are related to my parents, but there are a bunch of people I call my aunts and uncles, because they have been around my whole life. I see there kids as my cousins.
Your friends are a big part of your family. They are always there for you. Friends help you get through your problems, and you feel comfortable enough to be yourself with them. Most people spend the most curtail part of their life, adolescence with their friends. So friends are with you when you develop a sense of self, more then your relatives are. My best friend, and his parents, and brother, have all become part of my family. He is like my brother, and his parents are like my second set of parents. One year I was at their house more then I was at mine. Friends are a big part of your family.
Significant others play a big role in family as well. Whether you are 17 years old with a girlfriend, or you have been married for 50 years, that person has a similar role. They are the person who knows you the best. You tend to open up to that person the most. For the most part you share your home with them. They also help you start another part of your family. Kids and their family become your family. I have been with my girlfriend for 2 years and we have both become parts of each other’s families.
Family encompasses many people, and feelings. Anyone that you care about, and you feel comfortable with, and trust can be family. Your relatives and friends have the biggest influence on your personality, and your decision making. You may not be able to pick your relatives, but you can pick the rest of your family, but choose wisely.
Monday, October 13, 2008
weekend.
Saturday, October 4, 2008
Football quarter season
Wednesday, October 1, 2008
Tuesday, September 30, 2008
McCain v. Obama Debate
McCain's composure and reactions however didn't portray the same. He blinked a lot and is body moves about a bit while answering question. He also only looked forward and never gave eye contact to Obama as if he was scared. Obama however looked at McCain during almost every question. He sounded strong and firm just like McCain. He did however get a little agitated as he interrupted McCain a couple times. McCain's constant attacking showed that he was a republican that would probably never agree with any other party but Obama however laughed at some of McCain's comments and by saying he agreed with McCain's points in come cases showed him in a nicer and kinder fashion and even that he would be able to cross sides and work with the other party.
McCain also always tried to get back to the issue of government spending for every question he got asked when talking about the economy, never really answering the questions and at one point saying "Sure, but..." to get back to it. Obama however got right to the questions and answers them with solutions and bullet points. He was always truthful and never tried to fluff anything like McCain sounded with his lack of answers. McCain did however attack Obama but Obama came back with clear and strong responses making McCain's attempts fail.
Overall, both McCain and Obama did well but McCain's nervous behaviors and Obama's strong and firm responses pull him on top.
Presidential Debate #1
Barack Obama came off well prepared. He was ready to respond to every comment McCain made. He looked at Senator McCain when he talked, or referred to him, like a real man and leader should do. Obama spoke firmly and confidently. When he speaks, I feel like I can trust him. Obama over powered McCain in the argument; it showed, and there differences were like night and day. Obama had points and steps to every idea that he proposed, showing that he is well organized, and thinks things through. I honestly feel that Obama is the obvious choice for the United States. We need change, and we need it now. Electing McCain will be like repeating a mistake.
Obama & McCain Debate
Although McCain's confidence level was not showing as much as Obama's, McCain did have good hand motions that flowed good along with the words to his answers. Also, he spoke about how he is older which relates to all the experience he has. He seemed nervous in the beginning, his voice was quiet and almost weak. By the second question he seemed to stand firmer with his answers. When the mediator said they had to move on, McCain interrupted him twice. Also, when asked about three times to respond directly back to Obama, he did not.
Overall, Obama stood out as the stronger debater. He had good eye contact, a strong speaking voice, and clear concise answers.
The Red Sox post season analysis!
My Picks
SOX V. ANGELS
GAME 1- W - 4-3 Lester vs. Lackey
GAME 2- L - 8-2 DiceK vs. E. Santana
GAME 3- L - 5-3 Bartolo/Byrd vs. TBA
GAME 4- L - 6-5 Bartolo/Byrd vs. TBA
CUBS BEAT THE ANGELS IN THE WORLD SERIES 4 GMS TO 2
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McCain v. Obama (Round 1)
Obama's appearance was also a huge part of the debate. He wore the American Flag pin that his was, earlier in his campaign, critized for not wearing. Obama also did not slouch. His posture was kept upright and very attentive, taking notes while McCain was speaking, and never missing a beat to attack him. His hands were active but not overly active. He kept them just out in front of him, not making any big handjesters.
This debate was the very promising for Senator Obama. He stated main points, even if they weren't the points relative to the questions being asked. McCain was not on point and he made little, if no eye contact with Obama. Pay attention to body language, not only the answers of the questions. The appearances of people can tell you alot about that person.
Presidential debate
Obama/McCain Debate
Monday, September 29, 2008
Presidential Debate
Obama v. McCain
Debate Analysis
Sunday, September 28, 2008
Blog 3
sept. 26-28 weekend
presidental view on the media
Tuesday, September 23, 2008
Blog 2
Monday, September 22, 2008
Summer Job
CYO
Blog 2
Sunday, September 21, 2008
Patriots can kiss the playoffs goodbye.
Blog 2
Blog 1
Quintin Tarintino movies
Blog 1
Thursday, September 18, 2008
2nd blog carlos mota
first blog "carlos mota"
1. I ran for president of my class and lost for many reasons was why i failed but i know what was the main reason i failed. I wasn't popular enough so of course the most popular senior got all the votes and hardly got any. Even though i lost i learn something that day, i learn that you must be either popular or must have connections to do much in politics. I wasn't upset i know i did my best so i didn't beat myself up for losing am just glad i ran for president.
2. I remember a time that i exceeded my own expectations it was in a football game. This football game meant a lot to not only me but our entire team our spirits where crushed and looked bleak, we where down in score but not by much and looked like the other team was about to score. If they would have scored it was gonna be the end of the game not because time ran out but because our spirits would have been to crushed for us to do anything. So i was on defense and i realize that they are going to run the ball to my side so i do what any other linemen would do i moved over so i could be in the way of the runner. I did something i had no idea i could do i took on 4 guys and made the play i ran right by 2 of them and hit the third guy to the floor and managed to tackle the runner it was an exciting play and what was even greater is that we ended up winning the game.
Monday, September 15, 2008
blog 1
Wednesday, September 10, 2008
Part 1
.My name is Peter Richardson, and im 18 years old. I live in Marlboruogh MA, and I attended Assabet Valley Reginal High School. I have a girl friend that is currently a senior in high school. I like to go 4-wheeling and working on my truck. I also like to hangout out with my friends in high school. I also have three older brothers, two sister inlaws, and two nephews.While i was at Assabet i played two sports hockey and baseball. Last year i was very honored to be named caption of the hockey team. for baseball I was the caption since my junior year which is pritty sick. I love partying with the hockey boys it was the best, and just hanging out with the baseball boys was awsome too.
Part 2.
1.Her details that engage me in her essay are that she know all the points. She knows that if you have a big noise you loss a piont, also sucking up, skinny lips, and they subtract a piont if you play the piano. Also she new that you wold gain points if you had nice breasts, unpainted nails, more pionts for smartness.
2.Bosley's essay matters to other people because they can relate to it. They can relate to it because maybe one of there parents have told them that they could loss a pound or 20. Someone could also relate because maybe they ad a dream but they didnt have money to accomplish that dream.
3.The thing that I liked most about this essay was that she wasnt ashamed of were she came from or that she didnt have a lot of money. I liked that because i like to be able to relate to the writers piece when i read it.The main suggestion that I have about this essay is that maybe she should have sasid who won the pagent and why.
4.Bosley give a few ideas of how she could have lost the junior miss pagent but she never give a legit reason why, so I would say that she doesnt deliver. The point of the essay is to get people to under stand what kids are put through when parents put them into pagents or tallent shows.
EXPLORING IDEAS
2.This essay speaks to all different readers and areas. One of the groups that this essay could apply to is pleople that there parents were hard on them. Or perhaps maybe people that have dreams that cant achieve them because they dont have the money too.
3.Well i like to play sports so that is a way that i fit in with my friends or just other people. Most of all of my friends that I associate with i have play a sport either with them or even againstthem.
IDEAS FOR WRITING
1.The disappointing activity I was a particapent in was an intense playoff hockey game. It was my junior year in high school and i played for the Assabet hockey team.The game was against Littleton witch we had lost to and beat. We were down by on e for most of the game and then we tied it up half way through the trird period. We went into two overtimes and it was just a crazy game the fans were awsome and stuff it was great. But with 3 minutes left in the secound overtime our team caption got a penalty and we were down a man. I was on penalty kill so i was out there. With like 30 secounds left to the penalty there defensmen got the puck at the point, so I went down to block the shot but it went through my legs and made it to the net. The puck got tipped and went off my goalies glove and into the net. It was a sad ending to a great year and the end to a great team.
2.A moment that i excieded probly was when my hockey team made the playoffs this year. This was a great Moment because no one thought we would be able to pull it off bet we did.
Tuesday, September 9, 2008
My name is Brendan Marsh and I'm 18 years old. I'm from the little town of Dudley, MA, which is located in southern Mass. I am majoring in Computer Science here at Westfield State College and plan on moving into the programming field when i graduate. Outside of school I enjoy pretty much everything from reading to hanging out with my friends to playing soccer. I pretty much just do everything. If you want to know anything else, I guess just text me 508 479 2045. My phone is my life.
Part 2
Writing Strategies
1. The details that really caught my eyes in this essay were the ones in which Bosley would doubt herself about winning the pageant. The whole essay was a mere surgery on all of her flaws and what she would need to do to fix them and win the competition. Also, her mother would constantly name ways for her daughter to have a better chance at winning the pageant.
2. This essay could matter to anyone in the world. People everyday try their hardest to achieve a goal and that is the moral if this "story". You don't have to be perfect at something, all you have to do is just try your hardest. As long as you go into your "pageant" giving everything you can it is impossible to lose.
3. What I like most about your essay is how you explain in between the lines that you should give your all in any sort of competition or just in general everyday life. The main suggestion I have about your essay is that I wish you had elaborated on how your mother reacted after she found out you had lost the essay.
4. Bosley, unfortunately did not deliver in telling us how she lost the pageant. She did not state it in the essay but it can be determined from the details of the essay that she lost because she did not have enough self-confidence. The main point of this essay is to explain to all people that you don't necessarily have to win, but as long as you try hard enough and put in enough effort that is a "win" in itself.
Exploring Ideas
2. Bosley's point about beauty pageants can easily be put in to effect with today's society. Today all over television and magazines are ways telling people how they should look or how they should act. If you are not the skinny, beautiful model or the muscular, speedy football star you are seen as a nobody and are put down by society.
3. The perfect example of this is the idea of drinking. Its as if you almost need to drink to fit in. These days there are many people that will do things just to fit into a certain crowd.
Ideas For Writing
1. I have been playing soccer my whole entire life. I have trained everyday and I have played for my school teams and club teams since I was 5 years old. My senior year in high school i was looking forward to the soccer season more than anything, however in tryouts I had broken my ankle and was not able to play. I had never been more disappointed in my whole life.
2. I have never been one to be great at writing papers. I always write average essays just to get the B, maybe even an A here or there. My senior year in high school I had the hardest grading teacher in the English department and I received an A on a paper in her class. I was ecstatic when i got the grade back. This has made me try harder on all the papers I have written since then because I now know that it is possible to do anything you put your mind too.
Hi my name is Erin Mulcahy, I am a freshman and a Mass Communications major. I'm from Abington, Ma which is about half an hour from Boston. I am a big fan of all the Boston sports teams and hockey is my favorite sport to watch.
Part Two
Writing Strategies
1. Bosley's details gave me a vivid visual of her surroundings and what she was experiencing. When she said, "...mixed-shag, contrasted so loudly with the cheap 70s furnishings that it threatened my attention to the television set...", I could clearly imagine the description and immediately thought of my grandparents old house. "Clearly, I lacked the save-the-whales and-rainforest civic mindedness required...", Bosley describes what she knew the judges expected to hear in the question and answer portion of the contest. Her details throughout the essay kept me amused and interested in her story.
2. Bosley's essay could matter to others who have experienced a let down such as this or someone who competes a lot. For someone who does not care about pageants, it can teach them to always try their hardest even when they believe they are going to fail.
3. What I like most about Bosley's essay is that she was truthful about her life and her experience and her details kept my interest. The main suggestion I have about her essay is to talk more about the actual pageant, such as what else she had to do besides her routine and the question and answer.
4. Bosley does tell us how she lost the pageant. The point of her essay was to describe why she lost and that even from the beginning she knew she was not going to win. She lost the pageant due to not having the right clothes, car, pictures,and being engaged at 17. Also, her answer to the judges question was original and not the usual world hunger or environmental answer.
Exploring Ideas
2. Bosley's point about beauty pageants speak to larger issues because it shows how competitions are sometimes more about who has the more expensive or brand name items. The media projects a certain look and if not followed is looked down upon.
3. When I first entered high school I did feel that if I acted a certain way then I would have a lot of friends and ultimately fit in more and be happy. I quickly learned that that does not create happiness. It is true that if you act yourself then you will find true friends that like you for you.
Ideas for Writing
1. Freshman year of high school I played on my school's very first girls lacrosse team. I found out that I was out of shape and not good at running a lot, which lacrosse requires much of. I improved throughout the season but did not like playing at all. I felt as if I had disappointed my dad because he loved going and watching me play a sport instead of watching my dance recitals. Lacrosse took up a lot of time which left me none for dance class and homework. Overall it was best that I did not play the next year, I improved in school and as a dancer which I enjoyed more.
2. When I visited my aunt in California her neighbor took me horseback riding. At the time i was young and scared of heights, but I ended up getting on the horse and doing a few tricks. After, I felt like I could do anything because I knew I overcame a fear.