Part One



Hey. I am Joe Largay I am 18 years old and I am from Agawam MA the home of Six flags. My Major is Aviation Management and I am a freshman. I enjoy watching football but mostly my favorite team, super bowl champions the New York Giants. Although most people think that I am a New york fan, I am a Red Sox fan and a Celtics fan.



Part Two



Writing Strategies

1) Bosley provided details about what she could do to give herself a better chance to win the pageant but she had always doubted that she could even come close to winning. She also gave details on how her mother wanted her to do things to give herself a better chance like losing weight to become prettier.these details made the essay seem that it should not have been written because of the fact that if Bosley doubted herself that much then she should not have entered in the pageant.

2)This essay could matter to others because it could show them that no matter what circumstances, you should always try your hardest to achieve a goal that will make at least someone happy. This essay is not about a pageant it is about trying with what ever you have to give.

3)"What I like most about your essay is" that is shows details of why you thought you would lose but you still gave it your all to succeed and at least try. "The main suggestion I have about your essay is" that it should not have included as much detail about how you thought your mother wanted you to do better but it should have had why you wanted to do better.

4)Yes Bosley told us how she lost the Junior Miss Pageant but she also told us that she new she was going to lose because of the things that she thought was wrong with her. the point of her essay is to show that she new she would not win but she still tried anyway.


Exploring Ideas

2)Bosley's point of her essay speaks to all that understand competition in the fact that it has to due with winning and losing. it also has to do with how well people are during competition that weather they are rich or poor they are all after the same thing but they have to go about different ways to achieve their goals.

3)Most people do things to fit in with certain crowds but based on that it is usually based on what you enjoy doing to get you to belong or look like you belong to a certain group. there is always many groups in schools and in society based on people s likes and dislike but also on what they do to fit in.

Ideas for Writing

1)One experience that I was involved in was that I was in a fishing tournament that I thought that I could win because it was on a lake that I knew where all the big fish liked to swim around and feed but it was just not my luck that day and I was skunked the entire day by people who have never fished at that lake before.

2)An experience that I recall that I excelled in was when my grandfather took me archery shooting for the first time. I had no idea what I was doing and surprisingly I did great. During the few months that I did archery I achieved a Robin Hood which was really cool to do.